Friday, July 19, 2013

You Will Never Leave Me

The stage set carefully:

The ring on the table,

One last kiss of moisture in a glass.

You never suspected the water.

Now I can't stop staring at

The dead of your eyes.





Prompt.  Thirty words plus these three:  Ring, Water, Stage
On now to this weekend's Trifextra challenge.  This weekend we are giving you three words and asking for you to give us back another thirty of your own, making a grand total of thirty-three words.

Your words to work with are:

ring
water
stage - See more at: http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/#sthash.cBExdJRL.dpuf
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25 comments:

  1. KirJuly 19, 2013 at 10:52 AM

    OOOOH, sure you don't want to take it back?
    This was very good (and creepy on the only you can do it)

    TGIF!

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  2. IvyJuly 19, 2013 at 11:11 AM

    Holy crap! This is creepily awesome!

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  3. crystalJuly 19, 2013 at 11:57 AM

    That is creepy, but I enjoyed it..

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  4. LaTonya BaldwinJuly 19, 2013 at 1:27 PM

    Wicked. Like this.

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  5. AnonymousJuly 19, 2013 at 2:11 PM

    I heart this. Wicked. That last line(s). Awesome.

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  6. AnonymousJuly 19, 2013 at 3:38 PM

    You can sure write creepy! The demon's daughter from your last story is still in my head, and now this one :)

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  7. dontpanic2011July 19, 2013 at 8:21 PM

    Nice. "Kiss of moisture" - what a great phrase!

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  8. AnonymousJuly 19, 2013 at 8:42 PM

    I'm impressed... Intriguing and creepy.

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  9. LanceJuly 19, 2013 at 8:45 PM

    been there, done that, got the papers

    great last two lines

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  10. DraugJuly 19, 2013 at 10:14 PM

    Oooo very good, yes.

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  11. YveJuly 19, 2013 at 11:03 PM

    Nice!

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  12. PurpleMooseJuly 19, 2013 at 11:29 PM

    heh - good job!!

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  13. SuzanneJuly 20, 2013 at 6:51 AM

    Wow, super creepy! Nicely done.

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  14. lumdog2012July 20, 2013 at 7:44 AM

    Wow. Creepy and succinct. One way to deal with a messy relationship. Good one! :)

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  15. GinaJuly 20, 2013 at 9:38 AM

    Yes! Wicked = Fantastically hair raising!!!

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  16. AnonymousJuly 20, 2013 at 10:34 AM

    Enjoyed!

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  17. UnknownJuly 20, 2013 at 2:28 PM

    Murder! Mystery! Intrigue! Lovely.

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  18. AnonymousJuly 20, 2013 at 8:48 PM

    Powerful. Loved it. Thank you for linking up! ~Mary Beth

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  19. AnonymousJuly 21, 2013 at 3:49 AM

    Loved the dead of your eyes.

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  20. ShreyaKashyapJuly 21, 2013 at 10:10 AM

    creepy !

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  21. AnonymousJuly 21, 2013 at 10:38 AM

    Well done, and very relevant in the news stories I have been hearing about!

    But you give us that open-ended "what next?" thanks for pulling us in ;)

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  22. DebraJuly 21, 2013 at 11:01 AM

    Twisted & unexpected. I like!

    http://debbiesdays.wordpress.com

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  23. TrifectaJuly 21, 2013 at 2:31 PM

    Nice job with the prompt! I'd love to hear what happens next. Thanks for linking up.

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  24. AnonymousJuly 21, 2013 at 5:27 PM

    Mmm, I like it. Reminds me of "Porphyria's Lover."

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  25. BoJuly 21, 2013 at 8:02 PM

    Creepy good!

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