I can believe
the
blush of true love
implicit in our first kiss;
Heartbeat to heartbeat,
A true marriage
Ageless
Laughter
and Love.
So much more
Than my fantasy
Will
Disintegrate,
Vanish,
If you open that locked door
Tonight.
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Such a controlled piece, TIna! Love the threatening tone - the one-word cascade - mixed with vulnerability at the end. Excellent title, too!
ReplyDeleteI love how this starts all romantic like a fairy tale then quickly escalates into betrayal. Brilliant. The wrong door..and definitely the wrong choice. ♥
ReplyDeleteArtfully created
ReplyDeleteLoved the way you expressed a lot in just few words.
ReplyDeleteThe way you structured this was really fantastic. And I love how you answered the question. Wonderful job!
ReplyDeleteLive this one. So writerly!
ReplyDeleteI liked a lot of this, especially the emotional components. I am confused by the use of "Than" when I expected "Then," but somehow, it works.
ReplyDeleteFound you on Yeah, Writes. Looking forward to more.
Best to you,
Sally
You're getting REALLY good now, girlfriend!
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