Prolonged gazes,
surreptitious smiles
Brief patters of flirtation
Brief patters of flirtation
Drew them together
Every spring
Bright drops
Melting ice
Rivulets rolling,
Rivulets rolling,
Cascading
Over trembling hands
As he drank
Her sweet kiss
A deluge of passion
Halted only by the
Halted only by the
Sudden arrival
Of hateful Winter.
This is lovely, Tina! Very evocative. Especially - Cascading/Over trembling hands/As he drank/Her sweet kiss
ReplyDeleteOMG, how I've missed you!!! Yes, I know it's all my fault. Back into the blog visiting at last after a LOOOOOOONG hiatus. And SO looking forward to more of your awesome stuff!!!!
ReplyDeleteDeluge : )
ReplyDeleteLove this poem, Tina, and the way it rains down the page.
Like Kymm, I love the word deluge. It's just evokes emotions.
ReplyDeleteWinter ruins everything. (Even the word 'snow' makes me sad)
This was beautiful.
Damn you, winter! I was really loving their love.
ReplyDeleteLove the pacing in this - the long opening words and actions, followed by the shorter sharp ones of the second stanza that make the deluge come alive. Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteI like everything about this piece. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteoh how gorgeous! Love this, "As he drank Her sweet kiss" !!
ReplyDeleteI like your version of the story better: Persephone and Hades being in love.
ReplyDeleteA love story of the ages!
ReplyDeleteOne of my favourite stories and you tell it so poetically. Wonderful!
ReplyDeleteUGH! And winter totally arrived this week, too. lol You did a wonderful job with your words!
ReplyDelete"Hateful Winter" indeed! Your descriptions are sublime, and so very concise.
ReplyDeleteHave not experienced a terrible winter but I this describes it well.
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