You're towering over me now, bloody knuckles still clenched. I must appear defeated; blackened eye, swollen lip, bruised heart. You believe I'm your plaything, knocked off an imaginary pedestal.
Your victim.
Believe that.
I am not broken. You have to sleep sometime.
I am having #allthefeelings reading this, like I want to clap and wave and hug you. Tight.
ReplyDeleteI love the idea of treating him "the it" like a villain to defeat.
That last line was perfect.
Chilling, but like Kir I want to cheer...
ReplyDeleteI've known several people who were in abusive relationships. I've personally been in a few verbally abusive relationships but never a physically abusive one. One of the last boyfriends I had before meeting my current husband started becoming physically threatening although he never actually hit me. I'm a big woman, but I was quite frightened. I was afraid he might kill me.
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That image. That image of her lying there, broken, battered, but filled with strength, that is one powerful image. Wonderful response!
ReplyDeleteI suspect she may do more than escape. Perfectly written.
ReplyDeleteYou convey the thoughts and emotions beautifully. Wonderful last line.
ReplyDeleteGreat last line. As always, your words are perfect..
ReplyDeleteI like the purposeful intent of the last line reinforces the title. Great use of the prompt!
ReplyDeleteYou always deliver a great zinger, Tina! I used to say, if anyone ever did that to me, that I would have a bat at the ready for when they went to sleep. So yeah, I relate to this in that way. Go get him, I say!!!
ReplyDeleteI love how you had her defeated, only to rise up at the end with her chilling pronouncement! Whoa.
ReplyDeletemahahaha LOVE this evil vibe :)
ReplyDeleteoh man.. I'd like to see what happens once they're sleeping!
ReplyDeleteSo much power in her tone. No weakness. No pity. No shame. Nice work.
ReplyDeleteSO GOOD!
ReplyDeleteThat last line has me all tingly.
You made me want to show up with a bat and help...not that she needed it.
This is very relevant considering the NFL scandals going on! And, I hope it's obvious, I love a story about an abuse victim serving as her own champion! Great job with the imagery! -Melanie
ReplyDeleteLove it - there's great strength in your voice here.
ReplyDeleteI was surprised by the last line, and my heart surged at the chance for revenge. He certainly deserves whatever she'll bring. I know you didn't mention the he/she, but that's how I pictured it.
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