Oh, that calamitous creature, doubt. It seems it is small enough to creep over the window sill even with the window closed. I love the personification here and the skittering of the language when you're talking about your visitor, compared with the short, to-the-point language of your partner sleeping.
So two things came in through the window! You did a good job of capturing that new relationship middle of the night loneliness.
ReplyDeleteOh, no. Not again! It's the skittering that gets to me!
ReplyDeleteLove this, Tina!
I hate when my partner sleeps through the whispering of grave calamities! ;)
ReplyDeleteI hope it wasn't doubt.
ReplyDeleteOh, doubt is such a nasty little creature. Thoughtful take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteDoubt could definitely be seen as a creature in its own right, no?
ReplyDeleteLove your take on the prompt. Doubt certainly is a persistent creature. Nice one!
ReplyDeleteGreat, great. The story, yes. The layers, yes. But especially how you use the rhythm of your lines for maximum impact.
ReplyDeleteOh, that calamitous creature, doubt. It seems it is small enough to creep over the window sill even with the window closed. I love the personification here and the skittering of the language when you're talking about your visitor, compared with the short, to-the-point language of your partner sleeping.
ReplyDeleteI would have been up all night knowing that thing was lurking around!
ReplyDeleteWonderful how you've embodied doubt - or rather it's not. I preferred it when I couldn't see it. Great take.
ReplyDeleteFantastic metaphor and use of the title, Tina.
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