Smile pretty, chin up!
Never let anything seep into the cracks of the façade.
But I did.
You did.
A single word wormed its way underneath the foundation and what was left of me collapsed.
ooh.. this was a good one. it really brings you deep into the imagination, especially with the title and where the story goes... great plot development in such a few sentences. props!
This is good, too good! The last bit... Lovely take.
ReplyDeleteYou had me at hello, too, T. Great work.
ReplyDeleteOh. Yes, I met him once too.
ReplyDeleteThat moment is hard to forget. 😊
Happy Monday my friend.
Smartly and confidently done...great rhythm and perfect ending.
ReplyDeleteThe ending is really great. I love the line "A single word laid me low."
ReplyDeleteOh, this is good. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteLove the Hello laying her low!
ReplyDeleteWonderfully done. I could feel the word worming its way. And such an innocent little word at that.
ReplyDeleteHe had her at hello. Priceless!
ReplyDelete'what was left of me collapsed' *swoon* Rocking 'em, Tina!
ReplyDeleteI liked how you led up to the collapse and ended on Hello
ReplyDeleteooh.. this was a good one. it really brings you deep into the imagination, especially with the title and where the story goes... great plot development in such a few sentences. props!
ReplyDeleteOooh, it is as simple and incredibly complex as that!
ReplyDeleteoh very unique!
ReplyDeleteAs Andrea commented above -- it's as simple and complex as that. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteSo cleverly done. A great piece of writing.
ReplyDeleteOh - those last two lines really clinched it. Great, great emotional little piece. Thanks so much for linking it up!
ReplyDeleteYou had me at the cédille in façade.
ReplyDeleteSome facades crack easily.. if we just knew...
ReplyDeleteYour choice of rhyming at the end really drove the idea home. Lots of skill here!
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