The sole of his well-shod foot had only barely touched the dingy welcome mat when the door was yanked open. The girl was indeed a beauty, her skin pale and perfect, her blonde hair homespun gold. She smiled at him tremulously, good manners overcoming her natural curiosity.
"Mr. Matthias! Won't you come in?" She held the door, and took his hat. Her mother sat on the couch, her hands folded in her lap. She nodded to him as he sat down. Both mother and daughter leaned forward in anticipation.
"I'm sorry, but you're just not what the producers are looking for at the moment." Mr. Matthias had practiced his bad news face until it was second nature. But with Miss Elizabeth, he found some difficulty concealing his joy at destroying her dreams. The rainbow in her eyes had burned with such delicious intensity that he could not help but celebrate as it flared and died. Miss Elizabeth's shoulders slumped forward, a sob escaping.
"Please, Mr. Matthias! I'll do anything!"
Mr. Matthias specialized in finding a certain kind of talent. Talent that would pay him a significant finder's fee. They'd pay extra if Miss Elizabeth was a virgin. She would just disappear one day, of course, but that was the cost of doing business.
The prompt is the third definition of the word RAINBOW.
The prompt is this picture:
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And a quote from Sylvia Plath: "August rain: the best of the summer gone, and the new fall not yet born. The odd uneven time."
What a wretched, disgusting, evil man. I think there is a special place in Hell for people like him.
ReplyDeleteOh, great job with the story...you painted this predator well :)
Mr. Matthias is a middlemen exploiting people and their dreams. feel sad for Miss Elizabaeth.lovely narration
ReplyDeleteWhoa! You've created one nasty dude! Kudos! "breathing in their fears" set the tone.
ReplyDeleteUgh. There's a thread of real ugliness running from his head to his well-soled foot.
ReplyDeleteWell done. True to his character.
ReplyDeleteOooooh the rainbow in her eyes. Love that. Hate him, though.
ReplyDeleteAnd Silvia Plath <3<3<3
What a jerk. I hope he gets what he deserves.
ReplyDeleteOh, this is simply terrible.
ReplyDeleteGreat writing, but TERRIBLE human.
Oh, this is simply terrible.
ReplyDeleteGreat writing, but TERRIBLE human.
Oh, this is simply terrible.
ReplyDeleteGreat writing, but TERRIBLE human.
ew. what a tool!
ReplyDeleteHe's a scumbag-and your writing brilliantly made me feel that way about him. Great writing, about an evil, evil man!
ReplyDeleteI've been watching too much SVU? YOU?
ReplyDeletebut the writing, oh wow, the story just spun out of your words, painting this picture of a man as worn as his shoes, as slippery as I imagine his slicked back hair to be.
Oh Tina girl, impressive. XO
This is such a sad story, but, all too true. This is so well written, especially the way you decribe their anticipation.
ReplyDeleteOh, my. How wicked, how delicious, how tersely told.
ReplyDeleteWow. That was harsh. And fantastically done.
ReplyDeletewell crafted evil
ReplyDeleteYou know I like dark and twisted and you delivered. well done
What a sneaky,evil and sinister chap!Great character sketch and just loved the plot-extremely well written:-)
ReplyDeleteWow, this brings another vicious layer to the casting couch. Well done!
ReplyDeleteScary story and excellent writing of a villain, which is often difficult to do. It easy to over-do them, but you didn't make that mistake.
ReplyDeleteI loved this line: "Mr. Matthias had practiced his bad news face until it was second nature." Ha...that's good.
Well done:~)